Comments on: TAPE CRITIQUE http://www.myurbanreport.com/2009/10/tape-critique/ Another Shade of Information Mon, 06 Feb 2012 05:29:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.4 By: ND http://www.myurbanreport.com/2009/10/tape-critique/comment-page-1/#comment-5881 ND Sat, 07 Nov 2009 21:07:39 +0000 http://www.myurbanreport.com/?p=929#comment-5881 1 - First, I would highly recommend a voice coach. You swallow most of your words. This is a critical area you need to work on. 2. Relax your writing. If you were calling your mom what would you say as you described what happened. The woman "didn't report to police about the robbery," she told them. also you talk about the garage collapse and you say it "collapsed ON yesterday afteernoon." ON? 3. Shocked it could happen in their upscale community? This reminds me of a great poynter session I did for our staff once. Crime only happens in bad communities? When crime happens in a lower income commuinty residents aren't shocked? It's ok in some communities, but not others? 4. You have video of the mayor at the deck collapse. You could use a line to explain why she is there. 5. As Mackie Morris would say: write to your video. Occassionally touch he video with your copy. 1 – First, I would highly recommend a voice coach. You swallow most of your words. This is a critical area you need to work on.

2. Relax your writing. If you were calling your mom what would you say as you described what happened. The woman “didn’t report to police about the robbery,” she told them. also you talk about the garage collapse and you say it “collapsed ON yesterday afteernoon.” ON?

3. Shocked it could happen in their upscale community? This reminds me of a great poynter session I did for our staff once. Crime only happens in bad communities? When crime happens in a lower income commuinty residents aren’t shocked? It’s ok in some communities, but not others?

4. You have video of the mayor at the deck collapse. You could use a line to explain why she is there.

5. As Mackie Morris would say: write to your video. Occassionally touch he video with your copy.

]]> By: supeshooter http://www.myurbanreport.com/2009/10/tape-critique/comment-page-1/#comment-5846 supeshooter Tue, 27 Oct 2009 03:45:44 +0000 http://www.myurbanreport.com/?p=929#comment-5846 He does OK, but needs to work on his dialect. He does OK, but needs to work on his dialect.

]]> By: theurbanreporter http://www.myurbanreport.com/2009/10/tape-critique/comment-page-1/#comment-5845 theurbanreporter Tue, 27 Oct 2009 01:51:49 +0000 http://www.myurbanreport.com/?p=929#comment-5845 Jerry you seem natural on camera. I liked your walk and talk stand ups, and you have a smooth yet authoritative delivery. Here are a few suggestions: 1. Work on your articulation and pronunciation. 2. Start your packages by writing to your most visual images and try to paint a picture with your words. 3. Keep your vo short and let the interviewee tell the story in their words using the most compelling sound. Jerry you seem natural on camera. I liked your walk and talk stand ups, and you have a smooth yet authoritative delivery. Here are a few suggestions:
1. Work on your articulation and pronunciation.
2. Start your packages by writing to your most visual images and try to paint a picture with your words.
3. Keep your vo short and let the interviewee tell the story in their words using the most compelling sound.

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